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paranoid
08-26-2004, 01:00 PM
I'm not like
everyone else
I don't believe
or trust in myself,
I don't think
I'll get very far,
And I don't make a wish
when I see a shooting star,
I hate it when
someone talks to me,
And I hate everything
that I can see,
I'm glad
I'm not like you,
And I'm glad I don't
do the things you do,
You think I'm quiet
You think I'm calm,
But I'm screaming inside
And I know you're wrong,
I just hope you
stay out of my way,
'Cause I can't help
but make you pay,
I'll stab a knife
in your back,
This isn't fake
it's a fact,
So leave me alone
and don't come by me,
'Cause I will probably
make you bleed.



I'm not crazy!

demonchild1804
11-11-2004, 03:19 PM
The ending could use some work but other than that it's cool

I'll cut you just to taste you more.

darkknight
12-02-2004, 07:43 PM
I think the ending fits within the jagged edge of your lines, summarizing the deepest cut the poem can make with it's ending point. Good job.

I'd bite my tongue, but the bloodbath is more than I could swallow.